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I think Gio really captured alot of the emotions of the page, particularly the sequence in 3-5, we watch Marley fall apart and regroup, and I think it's just beautifully rendered. Gio felt self-consious about 6-8, because he felt it was too obvious and easy; the more I look at it, the more I disagree. I think it just puts more raw emphasis on the dialogue and on his drawing skills: no fancy angles, no distracting action, just the both of us displaying our craft. Then again, if either of us screw up our end, I never said this, and always advised him to change the panels, and will delete this post.


Six turned out lovely. And as you can tell, I haven't had to disavow knowledge; I think the quiet moment works, and it leads well into the first three panels on 7. And panel 4 is Rodriguez at his finest.


I think Gio loved this page and it shows- and that makes me smile.

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PAGE SIX;

 

Panel 1;

Marley shakes his head, and looks over Rodriguez’s shoulder.

 

Marley:    Yeah. Burning ganja is a sacrament, but liquor, drugs poison a brothas mind, makes em stupid.

 

Rodriguez: And how did you feel about the violence?

 

Panel 2;

Marley looks up at the ceiling, which should help clarify that by H.I.M. he’s talking about God.

 

Marley:    H.I.M. professed peace and tolerance. He said respect religion, respect race. We supposed be resistin downpression, not killin our bredren or rapin our sistren.

 

Panel 3;

Marley’s pissed, and his eyes are filling up with tears, and his fists are clenched on the table.

 

Marley:    We ain’t fighting Amagidion, we making it worse, with Omar the Basher fillin our ears with his politricks.

 

Panel 4;

Marley wipes his eyes, trying to look away to hide the fact from Rodriguez, who does him the courtesy of ignoring them.

 

Rodriguez: Did Omar Hasen direct the Ganjas’ movements?

 

Panel 5;

Marley is now a little more defiant, and a little more in control of himself, and his attitude is back; you wouldn’t be surprised if he called you a punk in this panel.

 

Marley:    The Ganjas don’t move unless someone tells them to.

 

Panel 6;

Marley’s expression hardly changes; he’s gotten a sarcastic shell up, and Rodriguez is very careful not to shatter him.

 

Rodriguez: Who tells them to move?

 

Panel 7;

Marley drops the name like it’s no thing. Like it doesn’t matter to him, when inside, he’s grinning.

 

Marley:    Raheem.

 

Panel 8;

Rodriguez isn’t surprised, but he gives Marley the satisfaction of reacting anyway.

 

Rodriguez: Adrian Raheem? The Mayor’s Aid?

 

Panel 9;

Marley remains stoic, with the hint of a gleam in his eye.

 

Silence.



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